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The bar chart below shows the divorce rates in two European countries in five years(2011-2015).

The bar chart below shows the divorce rates in two European countries in five years(2011-2015).
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The bar graph illustrates the percentages of
divorce
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 rates in
Finland
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 and
Sweden
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 from 2011 to 2015.
Overall
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, it is obvious that the
divorce
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rate
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 in
Sweden
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 was higher than in
Finland
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 in the first 4 years of the period given.
However
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, in the
last
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year
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,
Finland
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 was higher than
Sweden
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. With regard to the
rate
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 of
divorce
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 in
Finland
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. It started from around 35% in 2011 and
then
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 went down to a little more than 30% in 2012.
Moreover
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, the
divorce
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rate
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 surged to reach almost 40% in 2013,and in 2014, it increased a little by 2% to become around 42% and in the final
year
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, it did not change. Turning to
Sweden
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, the
divorce
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rate
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 in
Sweden
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 was approximately 43% in 2011 and
then
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 increased in 2012 by 6%. In the third
year
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, the
rate
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 of
divorce
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 decreased a little and became around 46%.
likewise
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, in 2014, it went down to 45%.
finally
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, in the final
year
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, the
rate
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 of
divorce
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 dropped obviously to reach 38%.
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Replace the words divorce, finland, sweden, rate, year with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "went down" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reach" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 3 times.
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