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The graph below gives information about the price of bananas in four countries between 1994 and 2004. write a report for a university, lecturer describing the information shown below.

The graph below gives information about the price of bananas in four countries between 1994 and 2004. write a report for a university, lecturer describing the information shown below.
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The line
chart
 provides information about the
price
 of
bananas
 in four different countries
such
 as Japan,
France
, Germany and
USA
Correct article usage
the USA
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 during the
year
Fix the agreement mistake
years
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 1996 to 2004.
This
 statistical data shows the highest and lowest
price
 of
bananas
 and
added
Verb problem
apply
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the data is given in US dollars
According to
 the data it depicts that Germany and
France
faces
Wrong verb form
faced
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the
Correct article usage
apply
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fluctuation in
price
 by the
year
 1994-2004 , it had increased from 2kilogram to 3kilogram. Japan
shows
Wrong verb form
showed
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 a good literacy rate during the
year
 1999. Gradually the
price
 of the
bananas
 increases by the following
year
 As shown in the
chart
 USA
maintains
Wrong verb form
maintained
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the
Correct article usage
a
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 stable
price
 level
of
Change preposition
for
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bananas
 till the
year
 2004.
In
addition
Add a comma
addition,
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 only Japan shows
the
Correct article usage
a
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 drastic change
of
Change preposition
in
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price
 level
comparing
Wrong verb form
compared
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 with other countries. In the
year
1999
Add a comma
1999,
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 the
price
 of
the
Correct article usage
apply
show examples
bananas
are
Wrong verb form
was
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 lower in
France
as
Change preposition
apply
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compard
Correct your spelling
compared
 to
USA
Correct article usage
the USA
show examples
.
Overall
 the
price
 of
the
Correct article usage
apply
show examples
bananas
 by
comparing
Wrong verb form
compared
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 with other countries which leads to
increase
Correct article usage
an increase
show examples
of
Change preposition
in
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price
level
Fix the agreement mistake
levels
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. As per the line
chart
Add a comma
chart,
show examples
France
Change noun form
France's
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 value
is
Unnecessary verb
apply
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fluctuated
upto
Correct your spelling
up to
 3 dollars. The overview of the
chart
gives
Verb problem
shows
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 that, there
is
Wrong verb form
was
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 a demand for
bananas
 during the
year
Fix the agreement mistake
years
show examples
 1996-2004.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words chart, price, bananas, france, year with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "data" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 3 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Trend
  • Fluctuate
  • Increase
  • Decrease
  • Stable/Stability
  • Significant
  • Gradual
  • Sharp
  • Slight
  • Peak
  • Plummet
  • Spike
  • Level off
  • Dip
  • Plateau
  • Cost
  • Price
  • Currency
  • Decade
  • Year-on-year
  • Economic factors
  • Consumer demand
  • Inflation
  • Market forces
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