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The graph below shows the number of tourists visiting a particular Caribbean island between 2010 and 2017. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant

The graph below shows the number of tourists visiting a particular Caribbean island between 2010 and 2017. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant
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The given line graph illustrates the volume of visitors arriving on a specific Caribbean
island
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 over a period from 2010 to 2017.
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 the total of holidaymakers journeying to a particular Caribbean getaway experienced an upward trend during the whole time.
Besides
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 that, the figure for
travelers
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travellers
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 staying on
cruise
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ships
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 was lower than those who stayed on
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island
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the island
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 during most of the period. As it can be clearly seen, there were approximately one
million
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 tourists visiting the Caribbean
island
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 in 2010, of whom 75,000 chose to stay on the
island
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 and the other guests decided to camp aboard
cruise
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ships
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.
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,
while
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 the number of guests staying aboard
cruise
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ships
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 decreased slightly over the next two years to slightly under 0.25
million
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, staying on the
island
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 remained a more popular option with 1.25
million
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 people. Over a period between 2012 and 2017, the figure for tourists boarding
on
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cruise
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ships
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 ascended continually to 1.5
million
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 in 2012, before going up and down several times within the following two years to reach 1.5
million
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 in 2017. Contrary to
travelers
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travellers
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 boarding the
cruise
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's data, the volume of visitors who stayed on the
island
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 decreased slightly in 2012.
However
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, during
5-year
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5 years
 from 2012 to 2017,
this
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 figure grew significantly and reached the highest point of 2
million
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.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words island, cruise, ships, million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reach" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "stayed" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 3 times.
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