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Some people think that schools should select students according to their academic abilities, while others believe that it is better to have students with different abilities studying together. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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There are a variety of factors influencing
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 well-rounded development of
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, one of which is
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 arrangement. Some people opine that
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 should be classified based on their academic performances
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 others support the idea of mixing
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 with various skills into a class.
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 essay will elaborate on two perspectives with details and give a compelling explanation
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 why a diverse studying group is an optimal option. Admittedly, considering academic capability as a category of grouping
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 brings some merits to both
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 and teachers. As for
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,
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 method can simultaneously act as a motivation for
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 learning, since they will put more effort
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 studying once their
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 are identified by their academic results. Regarding the teachers, it is easier to apply suitable teaching methods and materials to the relevant
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students
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 group, which
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 enhances
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education efficiency. Despite the above argument, I still strongly advocate the idea of grouping
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mixed ability
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classes
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. When
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 are immersed
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 a diversity, they can quickly learn from each other’s strengths and compensate for their weaknesses, creating a well-rounded education.
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, an excellent student in designing
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 can not speak English can accompany another one lacking in designing skills but being proficient in English.
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, since they are considerably inspired by their excellent peers,
lower-achievers
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 can find great motivation in
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 type of class to work more on their academic ability, leading to their gradual improvement. Compared to the former method in which
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 concentrate mostly on academic results,
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 reciprocal support among peers in mixed
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 is essential for student’s future with soft
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 and a proper social attitude that are rarely taught in academic ways. On top of
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, I strongly believe that
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 with diverse strengths rather than just top academic performance
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 more beneficial earnings for
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versatile development. In streamed
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,
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 put heavy effort
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 studying which usually poses serious pressure and leads to health issues. Meanwhile in a diversified environment, apart from learning from one another, it
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 creates opportunities for
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 to unleash their hidden
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abilities
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,
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 as creativity or leadership and hardly will they find studying pressure in
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classes
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. In conclusion, either streaming
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 or mixing those with diverse abilities owns their educational benefits. From my point of view, letting children study in
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 a dynamic educational environment is a more efficient approach to help them earn
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comprehensive development for the future.

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
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    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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