This diagram below shows the manufacturring process for making suger from suger cane.

This diagram below shows the manufacturring process for making suger from suger cane.
The diagram below shows the production of
sugar
from
sugar
cane.
Overall
, the production
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process of
sugar
is man-made and
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of 7 steps. The main equipment items are
:
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a combine harvester, crusher for the former process and an evaporator and centrifuge
machine
for the latter. As the diagram shows, the production of
sugar
cane starts with harvesting
that
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of
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plants from the field when they are one to one and
half
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years old for the purpose of making
sugar
from them. They are harvested in two different ways, either manually by humans or by
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harvester
machine
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. Afterwards, collected
sugar
canes are crushed in a grinder to produce
a
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juice. In the following stage, the juice is purified by the limestone filter.
Furthermore
, purified juice is heated in
evaporating
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the evaporating
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machine
. During
this
stage
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stage,
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the vaporization of water creates the syrup.
Subsequently
, the syrup is poured into
centrifuge
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a centrifuge
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machine
to separate the
sugar
crystals. In the final stage, separated
sugar
crystals are dried and cooled in a container and
final
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product is
sugar
.
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