In some countries, the government promotes public transport as the primary means of transportation and discourages private vehicle ownership. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages of this situation.
It is said that public transport should be considered as the main travelling method in an attempt
of decreasing
the number of car owners Change preposition
to decrease
in
Change preposition
on
road
, Add an article
the road
meanwhile
other counter-arguments do not agree with the idea. In my point of view, I strongly believe that public Add a comma
meanwhile,
commuter
bring enormous benefits that Fix the agreement mistake
commuters
overweigh
their demerits.
On the one hand, most of the metropolis are facing Verb problem
outweigh
with
bad traffic Change preposition
apply
condition
which is extremely terrible in rush hour. Less Fix the agreement mistake
conditions
vehicle
Fix the agreement mistake
vehicles
in
the road means creating more space for commuting Change preposition
on
that
obviously makes Correct pronoun usage
which
driving
experience less Add an article
the driving
stressed
when arriving on time. Replace the word
stressful
Moreover
, Linking Words
citizen
in big cities Fix the agreement mistake
citizens
also
Linking Words
has
Unnecessary verb
apply
sufferd
many Correct your spelling
suffer
kind
of pollution Change to a plural noun
kinds
such
as air Linking Words
polution
, Correct your spelling
pollution
noise
Correct word choice
and noise
polution
so that a private Correct your spelling
pollution
car
limitation certainly solves the problems and makes life more comfortable and healthier.
Change noun form
car's
On the other hand
, buses or trains are claimed for Linking Words
unsafed
places which harbour several hidden dangers Correct your spelling
unsaved
unsafe
such
as sexual Linking Words
harrasment
or pickpocketing. Correct your spelling
harassment
Futher more
, public transport Correct your spelling
Furthermore
are
Change the verb form
is
also
supposed Linking Words
unconvinient
Correct your spelling
inconvenient
especially
in Add the comma(s)
, especially
immergency
situations when private vehicles are often taken Correct your spelling
emergency
advantages
Fix the agreement mistake
advantage
.
In conclusion, Change preposition
of.
although
public transport does not satisfy everyone always, it Linking Words
is supposes
that it Change the verb form
is supposed
the
Add a missing verb
is the
more-likely
Correct your spelling
more likely
solutions
Fix the agreement mistake
solution
for
Change preposition
to
metro’s
problems.Correct article usage
the metro’s
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