In some countries, the government promotes public transport as the primary means of transportation and discourages private vehicle ownership. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages of this situation.

It is said that public transport should be considered as the main travelling method in an attempt
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the number of car owners
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other counter-arguments do not agree with the idea. In my point of view, I strongly believe that public
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bring enormous benefits that
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their demerits. On the one hand, most of the metropolis are facing
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bad traffic
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which is extremely terrible in rush hour. Less
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in
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the road means creating more space for commuting
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obviously makes
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experience less
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when arriving on time.
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,
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in big cities
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of pollution
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pollution
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pollution
so that a private
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limitation certainly solves the problems and makes life more comfortable and healthier.
On the other hand
, buses or trains are claimed for
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places which harbour several hidden dangers
such
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harassment
or pickpocketing.
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Furthermore
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supposed
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situations when private vehicles are often taken
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In conclusion,
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public transport does not satisfy everyone always, it
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that it
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more-likely
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solutions
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metro’s
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problems.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • public transport
  • commute
  • carbon emissions
  • economical
  • maintenance
  • overcrowding
  • socio-economic group
  • infrastructure
  • reliability
  • flexibility
  • public policy
  • sustainability
  • personal mobility
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