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The graph illustrates the average prices of three metals

The graph illustrates the average prices of three metals
The graph illustrates the average prices of three metals that have been changed in the
year
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of
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2014.
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, all of the prices were in
the
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 downward trend but in the
last
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 two
months
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 of the
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year
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 the prices
were
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recovered to rise. Looking for more details, the
price
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 of copper in the first month of the
year
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 was 2 and it started to decrease to reach the lowest
price
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 in June
for
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 -1%.
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, the
price
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was
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rebounded to increase
with
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by
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 1% in July and remained
steadily
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steady
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 around the
price
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 for the next three
months
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 before falling
for
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 0.5% in October and November and starting to rebound again in December to achieve 2%. Considering next for the ratio of the nickel, it started with the highest
price
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 in January, at 6% but it sharply decreased in the next two
months
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 to reach 1% in March. The
percent
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per cent
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 was slightly changed until May, but it considerably
fallen
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 in June to rate at -3 in June and it moderately rebounded to
be
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-1% in July and remained
stably
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 for the next three
months
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. In the
last
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 quarter of the
year
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, the proportion of the
price
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 was fluctuating because it decreased
for
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 -1% in October and noticeably rose in the
last
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 two
months
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 of the
year
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, with over the percentage
1
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% in December.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "last".
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 100%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words year, months, price with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "illustrates" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "changed" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decrease" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "fall" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reach" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 2 times.
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