The chart below show the number of Japanese tourists travelling abroad between1985 and 1995 and Australia's share of the Japanese tourist market.
The bar chart illustrates the
number
of Japanese
having a trip overseas in 10 years time, starting from 1885. The line graph depicts the percentage of Japanese
people visiting Australia.
Overall
, the number
of the
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Japanese
tourists travelling abroad increases every year, except for in 1991. The trend of the share of Australia and the trend of the number
of the
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Japanese
tourists is pretty similar. The drop in the number
of Japanese
citizens having a trip abroad affects the share of Australia in JApa
At the outset, the number
of the
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Japanese
individual
having a trip overseas was Fix the agreement mistake
individuals
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million
. This
number
gradually increased every year; nonetheless
, there was a drop occurred in 1991, which decreased from approximately 11 million
to 10.5 million
people. Nevertheless
, this
number
continued rising until reaching the
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a
at
15 Change preposition
of
million
in the last
reported year.
As both graph
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graphs
pretty resemble
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show
the
Australia’s share in the Correct article usage
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Japanese
tourist market started at merely 2 per cent, and it gradually increased until in
1989. It dropped a little from 5 per cent to around 4.25 per cent. After that, it rose again to approximately 6% in 1994. Between 1994 and 1995, it decreased, and it tended to continue decreasing.Change preposition
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