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The chart below shows the health spending among five different countries in 2002.

The chart below shows the health spending among five different countries in 2002.
The given bar chart illustrates the
health
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 spending among five various nations in 2002. The X-axis represent countries
such
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 as: Japan, Italy, France, Germany and
USA
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while
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 the Y-axis shows percentages of
health
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 spending of GDP.
Overall
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, it is apparent from the bar chart that Japan, Italy, France and Germany were spending the same levels of
health
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 are: the total spending, public spending and private spending in 2002
whereas
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USA
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 spent different of other.
To begin
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 with, France and Germany pupiles were giving same time for their
health
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 like: total spending and public spending were approx 12 and 10 percentages of GDP in 2002 when only a two out of hundred of private spending at same step mearly.
Furthermore
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, American spent their
health
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 GDP privately rather than public spending citizen of
USA
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 gave near about a fifteen in the private
health
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 care spending in 2002.
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, the total spending reached the peack point of forteen began at
USA
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 in 2002.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 78%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words health, usa with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentages" was used 2 times.
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