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The table below shows social and economic indictators for four countries in 1994, according to United Nations Statistics.

The table below shows social and economic indictators for four countries in 1994, according to United Nations Statistics.
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The table given provides information about socio-economic indicators in four different nations during 1994, based on data from the United Nations.
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, it can be seen from the information provided that Japan and Canada had the highest
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 of any categories listed compared with Peru and Zaire. On top of that, the two countries mentioned earlier
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 share a similar figure on Adult Literacy rate.
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, the annual income received by the Japanese was the highest
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 among other countries;
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 people in Canada gained at around 11,100 US dollars, being the second largest. The figure for expectations of birth life between Canada and Japan only had a slight difference;
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 the rate of literacy for adults exhibited the exact
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, at 99%.
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, Peru and Zaire were the two of these four cities where their citizens had an annual income of less than $200 US. Their figure's life expectancy at birth was
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 lower compared to other countries, contributing to 51 and 47 respectively. Other than that, the daily intake of calories taken by people in Zaire was only recorded at 1,739, making
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 country have the lowest
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 of any category listed.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also, while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words number with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "compared" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "provides" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "information" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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