The maps below illustrate a beachfront area in Australia from 1950 and today.

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Overall

, the road has expanded to cover the majority of the beach and there is

also

additional car parking present. The

play ground

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playground

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has been demolished but in its place are some new features including a surf club and restaurant. Looking at the diagrams in more detail, the road is now a lot longer compared to 1950 and leads to the lighthouse.

Theere

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There

also

double the parking space, as the

play ground

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playground

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that was

orignally

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originally

present has been destroyed in favour of

this

. The parking space that was around in 1950 seems to have doubled in capacity. The pavilion and dining tables have remained the same. The pool to the right of the beach is still the same size of 25 meters,

however

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however,

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the pool to the right has increased by two times going from a figure of 25 to 50 meters. Two surf clubs have been built and placed on either side of the swimming pools

as well as

a restaurant which is positioned on the left.

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The maps below illustrate a beachfront area in Australia from 1950 and today.

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In some countries, an increasing number of children are overweight or obese as a result of eating too much fast food. Banning fast food from school canteens is the best way to flight this problem. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

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