The maps below illustrate a beachfront area in Australia from 1950 and today.

Overall

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, the road has expanded to cover the majority of the beach and there is

also

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additional car parking present. The

play ground

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playground

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has been demolished but in its place are some new features including a surf club and restaurant. Looking at the diagrams in more detail, the road is now a lot longer compared to 1950 and leads to the lighthouse.

Theere

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There

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double the parking space, as the

play ground

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playground

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that was

orignally

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originally

present has been destroyed in favour of

this

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. The parking space that was around in 1950 seems to have doubled in capacity. The pavilion and dining tables have remained the same. The pool to the right of the beach is still the same size of 25 meters,

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however

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the pool to the right has increased by two times going from a figure of 25 to 50 meters. Two surf clubs have been built and placed on either side of the swimming pools

as well as

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a restaurant which is positioned on the left.

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Dec 22, 2023

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Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 5.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 5.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 9.0

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182 words

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The maps below illustrate a beachfront area in Australia from 1950 and today.

in many countries around the world, rural people are moving to cities, so the population in the countryside is decreasing. Do you think this is a positive or a negative development?

some people think that public libraries are no longer necessary, while others believe that public libraries still perform useful functions.Discuss both views and give your opinion.

In what ways does art reflect the culture and values of a society? What are the advantages and disadvantages of using art as a means of communication?

Nowadays many people chose to be self employed, rather than to work for a company or organisation. Why might be the case? What could be the disadvantages of being self employed?