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The diagram below shows how orange juice is produced.

The diagram below shows how orange juice is produced.
#juice
The diagram illustrates the steps in
production
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the production
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orange
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of orange
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juice
 and for the purposes of selling
in
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it in
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 supermarkets.
Overall
, there are 17 stages in the process of making orange
juice
, beginning with the collection of fresh oranges and ending with the
delivering
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delivery
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 of packaged
juice
 to shops.
Firstly
, oranges are picked, loaded
into
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onto
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 trucks and delivered to a factory where
there
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they
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 are thoroughly washed by a machine.
After
this
, the
juice
 is extracted from the oranges by a machine, and the solid waste, including orange peels and seeds, is collected for feed animals,
while
 the fresh
juice
 can be packaged and delivered to supermarkets,
also
 fresh
juice
 may be transferred to another factory for
evaporation
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the evaporation
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 process. During
evaporation
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the evaporation
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process
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process,
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 fresh
juice
 loses water and becomes concentrated
juice
. The
concentrate
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concentrated
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juice
 is canned and transferred to
warehouse
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the warehouse
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. After in
factory
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the factory
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 concentrated
juice
again
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is again
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 mixed with water and packaged.
Final
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The final
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 step packaged juices distributed to supermarkets, ready to be purchased
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words juice with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 2 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Orchard
  • Harvest
  • Processing facility
  • Quality control
  • Extraction
  • Pasteurization
  • Filtration
  • Preservatives
  • Fortification
  • Deaeration
  • Shelf life
  • Distribution
  • Bottling
  • Packaging
  • Labeling
  • Environmental impact
  • Sustainability
  • Waste management
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