The diagram below shows how orange juice is produced.
The diagram illustrates the steps in
production
Correct article usage
the production
orange
Change preposition
of orange
juice
and for the purposes of selling Use synonyms
in
supermarkets.
Correct pronoun usage
it in
Overall
, there are 17 stages in the process of making orange Linking Words
juice
, beginning with the collection of fresh oranges and ending with the Use synonyms
delivering
of packaged Replace the word
delivery
juice
to shops.
Use synonyms
Firstly
, oranges are picked, loaded Linking Words
into
trucks and delivered to a factory where Correct your spelling
onto
there
are thoroughly washed by a machine. Correct pronoun usage
they
After
Linking Words
this
, the Linking Words
juice
is extracted from the oranges by a machine, and the solid waste, including orange peels and seeds, is collected for feed animals, Use synonyms
while
the fresh Linking Words
juice
can be packaged and delivered to supermarkets, Use synonyms
also
fresh Linking Words
juice
may be transferred to another factory for Use synonyms
evaporation
process.
During Add an article
the evaporation
evaporation
Correct article usage
the evaporation
process
fresh Add a comma
process,
juice
loses water and becomes concentrated Use synonyms
juice
. The Use synonyms
concentrate
Change the verb form
concentrated
juice
is canned and transferred to Use synonyms
warehouse
. After in Add an article
the warehouse
factory
concentrated Correct article usage
the factory
juice
Use synonyms
again
mixed with water and packaged. Add a missing verb
is again
Final
step packaged juices distributed to supermarkets, ready to be purchasedCorrect article usage
The final
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