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Differences between countries become less evident each year. Nowadays, all over the world people share the same fashions, advertising, brands, eating habits and TV channels. Do the advantages of this trend outweigh the disadvantages?

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Nowadays more and more
people
, cultures,
countries
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 are becoming similar to each other. Every small
things
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 can be highly popular in many countries at the same time. Let us understand
is
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if
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this
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globalization good or
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not
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 for
general
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 public and how
is
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it
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impact
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 our lives. Personally, I understand the importance of international information exchange where
people
 can share their ideas conveying valuable
experience
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experiences
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.
Thus
, many activities,
things
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and things
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 become on demand in every country.
The
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 great example is how the fashion industry decided to get used to oversize clothing. In the USA many citizens were suffering from obesity and in everyday routine
such
 clothes became comfortable and really popular. Some years later the whole country changed their mind and started wearing it everywhere: in museums, schools,
theaters
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 and other popular entertainment places. Oversize was a distinctive part of the period of time in the USA history and now
this
 trend we can easily contemplate even in every country. These casual clothes are popular among fashion icons, cinema stars and other celebrities, so our eyes are got used to it.
Thus
,
people
 just steal great
practice
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practices
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 and adopt
it
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them
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 to their cultures.
However
, the key problem is that
people
 ruin their national identity with their culture. Watching Hollywood films
create
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 different role models and different lifestyles, so
people
 feel
them
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uncomfortable in
everyday
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their everyday
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routine
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routines
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.
Moreover
, getting dressed up like
main
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the main
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 characters of American films can make the way you look
like
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off the peg. All in all, using the best practice is cool, but adopting all foreign products and masterpieces can ruin your identity, so
people
 become unfamiliar
to
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 each other. Their mindsets separate citizens killing their culture.
Therefore
, it is just necessary to develop your own traditions and different eating habits, TV channels and other popular activities.
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introduction conclusion
Your essay lacks a clear introduction and conclusion. The purpose and structure of the essay should be established in the introduction, and the conclusion should clearly summarize your key points without introducing new ideas.
develop arguments
Your main points need to be supported by more focused and developed arguments, evidence, or examples. The current support lacks depth, making your argument less persuasive.
logical structure
Try to organize your ideas more logically. Each paragraph should contain one main idea and a clear connection to the thesis or topic of your essay. Avoid jumping between ideas without clear transitions.
task response
Ensure all parts of the task prompt are addressed. Develop both sides of the argument, discussing the advantages and dangers equally, and express your personal position more explicitly.
sentence complexity
Focus on clarity and avoid overly complex sentences. This will help your audience understand your ideas more easily. Aim for a balance between long and short sentences to enhance readability.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Cultural globalization
  • Cultural exchange
  • Cross-cultural communication
  • Assimilation
  • Homogenization
  • Acculturation
  • Traditional customs
  • Local economies
  • Diversity
  • Inclusion
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