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The maps below shows university sports courts in 1990 and now. 🔸Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The maps below shows university sports courts in 1990 and now. 🔸Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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the maps give us information about university sports courts in two different years ,
overall
 it can be seen that the greatest change was in the replacement of green
area
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and parking and
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 some new places. regards to sports courts in 1990 ,
in
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 the left of the
map
 there was
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a
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park
. which was a big space
also
in
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at
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bottom
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the bottom
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 of
left
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the left
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 side of
map
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the map
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 there was
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car
park
 which people used for parking
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car
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,
however
in
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 the right of
map
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the map
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 , there was
outdoor
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pool
besid
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beside
 of it between
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the
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park
 and
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the
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pool
 there was
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caffe , and
peseption
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perception
 to
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welcome
welcom
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 people
additionally
, there was changing room to athletes , on top of that there was tennis court behind
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the
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pool
 , recently ,
map
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the map
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 has changed
alot
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a lot
,
for example
 ,
instead
 of
park
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the park
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 now , it has
replaced
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been replaced
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 by
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basketball court ,
moreover
 , at present there
are
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 no
any
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car
park
 , now we have four tennis courts .
therefore
 ,
in
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 the right side outdoor
pool
 has changed to
indoor
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the indoor
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pool
 . bur
coffe
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coffee
 and reception
are
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remain unchanged
although
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the
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changeing
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changing
 room moved to
anothe
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another
 place where close to
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finess
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fitness
center
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,which is
it
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a new
centere
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centre
 that has
bulided
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bullied
in
recent
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the recent
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map
 .
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words map, park, pool with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "maps" was used 6 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "change" was used 3 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Layout alterations
  • Refurbished
  • Demolished
  • Erected
  • Renovated
  • Sports facilities
  • Tennis courts
  • Basketball courts
  • Football fields
  • Athletics track
  • Encroachment
  • Accessibility
  • Landscaping
  • Infrastructure
  • Spatial arrangement
  • Ample space
  • Congested
  • Upgrade
  • Downgrade
  • Amenity
  • Displacement
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