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You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. A friend of yours is going on holiday and has asked you to recommend a destination. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter recommend a good place that you have visited before for a holiday say where you went and where you stayed say what you can do there and what the food was like You should write at least 150 words. You do NOT need to write any addresses. Begin your letter as follows: Dear Chris,

#minutes #friend #holiday #destination #place #food #addresses #chris
Dear Chris, I am just writing
this
 letter to let you know that the place for holidays where I visited the
last
 vacation. Every year, I plan my vacation in different places but the
last
 visit was my most memorable trip because that time we really enjoyed our whole trip with plenty of good places at very reasonable prices. We went to Shimla by car. When we reached there we saw a lot of tourists because of
pleasant
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the pleasant
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 weather and the beauty of
this
 place. We stayed in the DN Pride Hotel near the highway. It was very beautiful and big with a lot of room options and
restaurant
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a restaurant
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 with a patio. As it's a hill station,
so
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apply
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there are many different kinds of outdoor activities like hiking, paragliding, skating and many more for all age groups. The food was very delicious with plenty of multiple choices at very affordable prices. Keep in touch, Annie
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coherence cohesion
Ensure that the letter adheres to a clear and logical structure. While there is some organization, it can be improved by better connecting ideas and paragraphs.
coherence cohesion
Make use of a variety of cohesive devices to ensure seamless transitions between ideas and paragraphs.
task achievement
The task is to recommend a holiday destination to your friend, providing specific details about where you went, where you stayed, what can be done, and about the food. You partially addressed these points but could expand further with more details and personal anecdotes to fully respond to the task requirements.
task achievement
The tone is generally suitable, being informal and friendly as it's meant to be a letter to a friend. However, make sure to maintain this tone consistently throughout the letter.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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