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The graph below show current rates of secondary and higher education among people in various parts of the world. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparison where relevant.

The graph below show current rates of secondary and higher education among people in various parts of the world. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparison where relevant.
#show #rates #education #people #parts #world #information #features #comparison
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The two bar
graph
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 provide information about
ratio
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the ratio
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 of
students
 for two levels which are
school aged
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school-aged
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 and adults
in
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oversea
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overseas
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 for both
gender
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.
Overall
,
europe
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Europe
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 is the significant ration for
accept
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secondry
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secondary
 of
educational
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the educational
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 system, as
samilar
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similar
as
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latin
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Latin
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 America
as
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and
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 East Asia.
Otherwise
, in high education
is
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it
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 decreased to half in Europe and the three
remaning
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remaining
 was
approximatly
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approximately
 30 and below.
With begin
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, the most
shool
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school
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student
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students
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 in oversease was
Europ
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Europe
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 which is just
belowe
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below
 100 for
femel
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females
, but
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for male
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male
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males
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 is just below 90.
While
,
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 adult
students
 decreased to half. Sub saharan
africa
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Africa
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was
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had
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 the lowest
school aged
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number of school-aged
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students
by
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less than 20
students
 for both
gender
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genders
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.
Latain
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Latin
 America and East Asia were similar range
students
 which around lower than half.
On the other hand
, adult
shool
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school
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 was fewer by about 20 % with
note
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a note
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 it the
femel
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feel
female
 is less than 20,
while
 in East Asia is more than 20.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words students with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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