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You are working overseas in an international company. You are leaving the country in an emergency. Write a letter to your friend. Apologies for leaving like this. Explain what happened. Tell them what you are going to miss about working.

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Dear Renuka, Hope you're doing well. I am writing
this
 letter to let you know that I am leaving for my home country urgently
due to
 my father's health issue. Let me explain my situation in detail. My father has been dealing with a heart complication for a long period. Now, his situation has become very critical, and has been admitted to the hospital for the
last
 2 days. I am only the child of my parents to take care of. All the responsibilities related to caring, and for groceries, now lie on my shoulders. I am very sorry for not informing you before but I need to leave
this
 country in an emergency. It is impossible not to miss working with you. We have been together for over two years and worked hard with a lot of cooperation and each other's support. I appreciate your guidance and support during difficult times in my work. Let's stay in touch and hope to meet you soon, Warm Regards, Parjit
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coherence cohesion
The overall layout of the letter is suitable, with ideas separated into clear paragraphs, but there's room to enhance the connection between ideas for smoother flow.
coherence cohesion
Include a more formal and respectful closing to better reflect what is typically expected in this type of correspondence.
task achievement
You responded to all parts of the task, explaining your sudden departure, detailing the situation, and expressing what you will miss. However, the response could be enriched with more specific details or anecdotes.
task achievement
The tone of the letter could be made slightly more formal and considerate, for example by using expressions such as 'I regret to inform you' or 'With a heavy heart, I must...', to better suit the emergency nature of the situation described.
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