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The diagram below shows the floor plan of a public library 20 years ago and how it looks now. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparison where relevant.

The diagram below shows the floor plan of a public library 20 years ago and how it looks now. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparison where relevant.
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The diagram below illustrates the floor view of the public library in the previous 2 decades and its visualization now.
Overall
, the major changes happen in a
room
 relocation by book
categorize
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.
Moreover
, the public library has new public places like
cafe
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cafes
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, lecture
room
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rooms
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, and storytelling events. The
detail
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 looks of the map
gives
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 information that
in
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the
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20 years ago, the central library
has
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 tables and chairs in the middle of the building and not for now, so that the place looks more spacious.
In
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 the right side of the
entrace
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entrance
 door was
enquiry
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an enquiry
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 desk that helped the visitors to get tickets or return books. Today, we can use those services with machines.
Consequently
, the enquiry space is replaced by the cafe. On the other side, we can see the computer
room
 that used to be a reading
room
 before. On the left corner of the construction, it was an area
that
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 we could find CDs, videos, or computer games, but at
this
 time it
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 as
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a books
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books
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 place for children's fiction and storytelling events which
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 two sofas for the viewers.
Additionally
, there is a lecture
room
 which was a book area for kids. At
the
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present, adult fiction books can be found near to information desk in front of the lecture chamber.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words room with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "information" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Floor plan
  • Public library
  • Layout
  • Bookshelves
  • Reading areas
  • Digitalization
  • Technological advancement
  • User needs
  • Space allocation
  • Facilities
  • Evolution
  • Community
  • Renovation
  • Adaptation
  • Accessibility
  • Multimedia
  • Archives
  • Reference section
  • Study carrels
  • Children's area
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