The graph below shows the information about medical care in three European countries between 1960 and 2000

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The line graph illustrates the amount of money spent on five different

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of consumer goods in Europe from 1960 to 2000.

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, all

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expenses

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experienced a downward trend except clothing during the given period of time. In 1960, the highest amount of money

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on food and it was around 34%.

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figure gradually dropped during the next 40 years

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and hit

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about 14%.

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, leisure was the second highest money spender and it

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declined to around 11% in 2000.

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the beginning of the period, both transport and fuel/energy spent around 10% and 5% respectively.

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, both figures were plummeted to its lowest rate in 2000, approximately 5% and 3% respectively. In 1960,

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about 9% and

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showed the most notable development with a steady growth

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given time period and reported a peak percentage in 2000, about 15%.

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Coherence and Cohesion: 9.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

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Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

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Task Achievement: 9.0

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Topic Vocabulary:

Healthcare
Healthcare expenditure
Life expectancy
Medical technology
Government spending
Population health
Access to medical care
Healthcare policies
Economic climate
Inflation rates
Gross Domestic Product (GDP)
Urbanization
Demographics
Public health
Quality of care
Preventive medicine
Chronic diseases
Healthcare infrastructure
Universal health coverage

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