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The bar chart gives infornamtion about the number of car journeys into the city centre made by residents and non-residents.

The bar chart gives infornamtion about the number of car journeys into the city centre made by residents and non-residents.
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The bar chart illustrates
average
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the average
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 number of
car
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rides
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 per day by
residents
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 and non-
residents
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 into the town hall from 1996-2005.
Overall
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, the highest amount of
rides
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 made by
residents
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 before
introduced
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 parking meters to the city
center
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centre
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. After that, non-
residents
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's
car
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 journeys became popular until closed
traffics
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traffic
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 in two lanes.
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, town hall visits of both groups were reduced notably after
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the indroduced
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indroduced
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introduced
introduce
 parking meters and traffic changes. In 1996,
residents
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 were made up
just
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of just
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 below 10000
car
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rides
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as
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apply
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the highest amount
through out
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throughout
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 the period.
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 it showed a downward trend with some fluctuations until
end
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the end
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 of the period.
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, first 4 years
this
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 figure fluctuated
in
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apply
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between 9000-10000 and after 1999 drastically dropped by almost half with parking meters.
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,
number
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a number
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 of daily
rides
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maintained
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remained
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 under 5000 until 2005. In terms of
non-resident
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non-residents
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, their
car
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rides
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 almost half of the
residents
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rides
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rode
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 in 1996 and the figure started to rise to about 8000 in 1999.
Its
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It
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 remained constant
the
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for the
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 next 3 years with
parking
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a parking
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 meter.
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, once introduced traffic conditions, plummeted to around 3000
rides
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.
Then
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 until 2005,
non-
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non-resident
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residents
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travels
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travel
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 became less than 5000.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words car, rides, residents with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "fluctuations" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
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