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Some argue that success in life is determind by where a person is born and how he or she grow up. Others believe that these factors have no effect on personal success. Discuss both these views and give your opinion

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Some people have a perspective that success in life is determined by their place of birth or how they were raised.
However
, others disagree and think these aspects do not influence others' goals.
This
 essay agrees that both homeland and how parents fostered their children contribute to the possibility of how successful their offspring is going to be.
To begin
 with, mindsets are structured from an early age.
Moreover
, youngsters learn from their relatives how to behave or a habitual mental attitude that determines how they will interpret and respond to situations. It is
therefore
 agreed that the environment he is provided with plays an important role in one's success. My cousin is a prime example, his father consistently told him not to give up in challenging situations and
also
 to be fully committed to achieving his dream.
As a result
, through hard work and principles he holds, he is considered one of the richest businessmen in the world.
On the other hand
, many argue and perceive that persistence is what matters the most. There is no doubt that the discipline one has to achieve something in life is really important to be successful.
For instance
, if you want to achieve a high score in math, you have to constantly practice to be satisfied. Despite
this
, I believe that childhood experiences can still be the leading factor to accomplish triumph. In conclusion, apart from persistence that contributed to milestones, early life
also
 made a bigger chance of winning.
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A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
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