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In the past, when students did a university degree, they tended to study in their own country. Nowadays, they have more opportunities to study abroad. What are the advantages and disadvantages of this development? You should use your own ideas, knowledge and experience and support your arguments with examples and relevant evidence.

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Previously, men and women would rather get a university degree in the county that they actually lived in. These days, there are opportunities to study abroad, and many choose to do it. The main benefits of
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 are better quality of
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 and the possibility
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 an internationally recognized diploma;
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, the key drawbacks are living far away from family and friends and the cost of living and
education
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 in different places. It is known that developed countries have a high quality of post-secondary
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, and many
students
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 from developing countries prefer them in order to get the best learning experience available. Sometimes their own countries do not even have anything to offer in their choice of specialization. Another advantage is that having a degree from a globally renowned academic institution expands career opportunities without the need to verify credentials, study and take exams again, which might take years, to prove qualifications.
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, many graduates from Eastern Europe with professions like doctors, teachers, accountants, architects, etc. must do it if they want to work in a speciality in the UK, US and Canada.
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, if there is a chance, it is better to get an
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 in an already verified university or college.
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, for some
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, it might be extremely difficult to live far away from loved ones, which might trigger dissatisfaction and a depressive mood.
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, they experience difficulties
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 adapting to new unusual conditions, and there is a high risk of them dropping out.
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, to live and study abroad often requires serious financial investments.
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, in the UK the cost of
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 for foreign
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 is much bigger than for locals.
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 is not always supported by funding or grants: most of the
students
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 pay from their own or family pockets or take loans.
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 the cost of living, rent, and medical expenses, which are
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 a big part of the budget.
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, studying away from home has its positives and negatives. The positives include a better level of
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 and an internationally verified degree,
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, the negatives are that it is costly and living alone in unknown places might not be easy for foreign candidates.
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Task Achievement
To improve Task Achievement, focus on expanding the discussion to cover more in-depth arguments related to the topic. Include a broader range of ideas and examples to provide a more comprehensive answer to the question. Ensure that each paragraph distinctly addresses either the advantages or disadvantages and that you are not combining discussions which can lead to a lack of clarity. Engaging with the question more fully by providing more specific experiences, data, or case studies could significantly enhance your response.
Coherence and Cohesion
To enhance Coherence and Cohesion, ensure that your essay has a clear logical sequence from the introduction through to the conclusion. Each paragraph should start with a topic sentence that makes it clear what the paragraph will be about, followed by supporting sentences that back up the opening statement with details, examples, or arguments. Use a range of linking words and phrases to help the reader see connections between ideas more clearly. Additionally, breaking down paragraphs into smaller sections may help improve readability and coherence.

Answer the 'Advantages and Disadvantages' topic

IELTS advantages and disadvantages questions normally give you a statement and ask you to comment on the advantages and disadvantages of that statement.

Answer structure for the type of essay

  • Introduction
  • Body paragraph 1 – advantages
  • Body paragraph 2 – disadvantages
  • Conclusion

Examples to start your body paragraph:

  • The main advantage is...
  • The disadvantage of this...
  • The main benefit...
  • Despite these advantages...
  • One possible drawback...

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