Many people think that painting and music do not directly improve the quality of people. Therefore, government should not spend too much money on artistic projects. Do you agree or disagree?

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Despite the belief held by some that music

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painting are not having a great impact on the quality of people. On account of

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, what the government has to do is not fund artistic

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. I agree with

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statement.

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essay will delve into the details of the given topic,

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to my opinion that will be elucidated,

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some corporations in order to justify my point of view.

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with,currently,the burning of living is increasing,dramatically.Owing to inflation,taxes and debt.

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, what the authorities and nations have to do is focus on any

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that can bring any profits in the short term.With the aim of reducing fiscal stress ,some governments pointed out some vigorous regulations.To illustrate

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, take my country (Egypt) as a clear example the authorities do not fund any sort of artistic activities.Not only

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but decreasing the number of graduations will be prioritized in the long run,as well .

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is because no intrinsic value in painting and music. What is more,because of some global crisis like climate change. So many nations invest in some critical

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in order to overcome the difficulties that were raised by

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issue. To elucidate

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, in the U.K. the funding for sustainable sources of energy is in the majority. When the spending on

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project, some ensued will be raised up like restrictions in artist or painting

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.So, any funding in painting or music will be some sort of silly. In a nutshell, these arguments collectively persuade me to believe that investment in vital issues has a tangible benefit in the quality of the public,because of the aforementioned clarifications

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Introduction & Conclusion

You should ensure that your essay has a clear introduction, body paragraphs, and conclusion. The introduction should present the topic and your opinion, while the conclusion should summarize your arguments effectively without introducing new ideas.

Logical Structure

Your essay will benefit from a more structured approach, with distinct paragraphs for each main idea. Begin paragraphs with a clear topic sentence, followed by explanations and examples that directly support that topic.

Developing Ideas

For a higher score, develop your ideas more fully with relevant, specific examples that support the arguments you are making. Avoid generalizations and ensure you directly address the prompt with a focused response.

Language Use & Sentence Structure

Spell and write out numbers (e.g., use 'rising cost of living' instead of 'burning of living', 'due to' instead of 'owing to', and '30%' instead of 'some'). Avoid using overly informal language and make sure to check for grammatical errors or awkward phrasing. Use a range of sentence structures for a more professional and coherent essay.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

Summary
Restatement of thesis
Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

In conclusion
To conclude
To summarize
Finally
In a nutshell
In general

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 8.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 9.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

275 words

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Many people think that painting and music do not directly improve the quality of people. Therefore, government should not spend too much money on artistic projects. Do you agree or disagree?

Include an introduction and conclusion

The working week should be shorted and workers should have a longer weekend. Do you agree or disagree?

In many countries around the world young people decide to leave their parents’ home once they finish school. They start living on their own or sharing a house with friends. Is this a positive or a negative development?

In many countries the number of animals and plants is declining. Why do you think this is happening? How can this issue be solved?

More and more people claim that modern work patterns are a source of stress. what do you think are the causes of this? can you suggest some possible solutions?