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The diagram below shows how rocks are created and destroyed in the rock cycle

The diagram below shows how rocks are created and destroyed in the rock cycle
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The image below illustrates the process whereby
rocks
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 are manufactured and knocked down.There are three types of
rocks
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 that are shown which are Igneous ,Metamorphic, and Sedimentary.
Firstly
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, the
rocks
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 are broken down into smaller particles
due to
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 excessive rain and weather changes.
Moreover
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,these stones are left as tiny crumbs
also
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 they are washed down after that, they go into the sediment.
Furthermore
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, in the ground there is the Sedimentary rock
additionally
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, in
this
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 layer the rock moves upwards at a lower rate. Next, is the Metamorphic rock in
this
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 layer there are extreme temperatures and pressure again,and the force
also
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 pushes stones to the surface.
Besides
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 that, there is
also
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 the Magma which is the crust
as well as
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 liquid again,
as a result
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 of a lot of temperatures above Magma is forced to move to the top with a lot of impact until it reaches the ground. When it reaches the second layer just below the surface it cools down and Igneous
rocks
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 are created.
In addition
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, Magma is split on the ground and it flows quickly as it will be Lava. The process keeps repeating again and again.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also".
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words rocks with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "moves" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reaches" was used 2 times.
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