some people think children should not be given homework every day, while others believe they should be given homework in order to be successful at school. Discuss both views and give your opinion.
There is no doubt that homework is not part of a school's syllabus.Right from when a child begins elementary school, they are most likely to be given one . Some say homework shouldn't be given on a daily basis , others believe it is necessary to make them thrive. In my opinion , I believe youngsters should be given assignments.
On the one hand , I agree take home exercises could improve a
childs
life skills and develop a good study habit.Change to a genitive case
child's
For instance
, research by the city
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City
univeristy
in Newyork concluded that those Correct your spelling
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youngters
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the self
self regulatory
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self-regulatory
process
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processes
while
performing their assignment are likely to be higher achievers.Therefore
, those who participate in homework could have
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to attend
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, It could be argued that this
students who don't participate have poor grades .
On the other hand
, too much workhome
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high school students responded that too Correct your spelling
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much assignment
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many assignments
such
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headaches
seen
to be detrimental to humans Add a missing verb
been seen
therefore
could be avoided .
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The essay provides a response to the prompt, but it could be more complete by clearly stating the writer's own opinion throughout the essay. The main ideas need to be developed more comprehensively and with clearer detail. To improve, the writer should deepen the analysis of each viewpoint and substantiate points with more specific and relevant examples. Ensuring that each paragraph has a central idea that is fully elaborated on and connected to the writer's opinion will strengthen the essay.
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