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Environmental problems are too big for individual countries and individual persons to address. In other words, we have reached the stage where the only way to protect the environment is at the international level. To what extents do you agree or disagree?

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It is often said that environment-related issues are becoming more serious and it is believed whare to tackle the problem is on the global stage. From my point of view, I strongly disagree with
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 the medicine to cure the problem comes from the people who live in the part.
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, it is worth noting that society needs to be more aware of these kinds of issues in order to get the best part
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 to life.
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, building awareness can be anywhere and anytime if the groups want to be more caring of nature.
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, the importance of education is one of the ways to spread knowledge to the res.
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, it is true that in school, students are educated about how to save the world and how to keep it in healthy condition.
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 the subject which may burn the case down.
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 bad pollution in recent years, individuals should be more desire to use public transport or ought to be creative to use plastics and keep the 3R (reduce, reuse, recycle) method in mind as well.
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, with these little projects, at least
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 issue can be tackled slowly. To draw the conclusion, the most simple and common things to help the environment are keeping the cognition to the planet and spreading science to everyone to be more conscious of problems on
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task achievement
Your essay addresses the topic, but lacks a clear position throughout, wavering between rejection and recognition of individual and international efforts to solve environmental issues. Clarify your stance in the introduction and maintain it consistently throughout the essay.
coherence cohesion
Your essay has an identifiable introduction and conclusion. However, they need to be clearer and more directly related to the topic. The body paragraphs should have a clearer connection to the central argument. Use stronger topic sentences to establish a clear main idea in each paragraph.
task achievement
While your essay provides some examples, they are not fully developed or particularly persuasive. Enhance your argument by incorporating more relevant examples and detailed explanations to support each point more convincingly.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • sustainability
  • ecosystems
  • biodiversity
  • conservation
  • renewable resources
  • carbon footprint
  • emissions
  • greenhouse gases
  • deforestation
  • ozone depletion
  • recycling
  • sustainable development
  • environmental degradation
  • climate change
  • global warming
  • fossil fuels
  • alternative energy sources
  • carbon trading
  • pollution
  • environmental advocacy
  • grassroots movements
  • international treaties
  • policy implementation
  • environmental legislation
  • green technology
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