The bar chart below show numbers of seals, whales and dolphins recorded in the gormez straits from 2006 to 2018

The bar chart below show numbers of seals, whales and dolphins recorded in the gormez straits from 2006 to 2018
The bar chart compares the
numbers
of three marine mammals, namely seal, whale, and dolphin that
recorded
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in the Gormez Straits between 2006 and 2018.
Overall
, it is clearly apparent that the
numbers
of
dolphin
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dolphins
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in the given period always increase from
time
to
time
. Meanwhile, despite the sudden drop
in
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the beginning of the period, the
numbers
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number
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of
seal
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seals
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climbed slowly. Turning to the detail, starting high at more than 40 seals recorded in 2006, over the next 4 years the
numbers
of seal population had
plummented
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plummeted
dramatically to just over 20 seals. These
number
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steadily
increase
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and
reach
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its
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peak in 2018
around
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45
selas
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seals
sales
.
However
, the population of whales constantly
fluactuate
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fluctuate
fluctuated
over the period. The largest
numbers
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, around 30 whales was recorded in 2018. As for the population of dolphins, from
time
to
time
it had an upward trend where the number of dolphins always
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. Despite being the smallest number in 2006, in 12 years it
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dramatically to more than 50 dolphins
was
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recorded in 2016.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words numbers, time with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "numbers of" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "numbers of" was used 5 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "dramatically" was used 2 times.
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