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Band 5.5

In the future, nobody will buy printed newspapers or books because they will be able to read everything they want online without paying. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement? Beka

Scientists conducted a study that in the modern days no one will
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purchase
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 and
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. I extremely agree with
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 statement , looking at how our world develops in technological terms, in the future they will abandon
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 and switch to electronic or holographic products. More and more people are choosing
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books
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 or audiobooks over traditional
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 does not mean that
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 will soon disappear completely.
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 have some advantages over
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. They are convenient for
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, as you can take a large number of
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 with you on one device. They are
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 environmentally friendly, as they do not require
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 and do not pollute the environment.
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 are often cheaper than
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 editions. I
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 think that
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 will be very convenient for schoolchildren
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 because it is very difficult to carry 5-6
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 to school, which is why there is a tendency to take small bags with you and carry only notebooks there. With the replacement of
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 with electronic ones,
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 problem will disappear and schoolchildren will be able to study normally and will be able to study even outside the home and outside the school, on the street. I
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 think that in the future, the functionality of
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 will increase, which will help in learning even more. Not only schoolchildren
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 but
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 university students or people whose work is connected with
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 will receive their advantages. In conclusion, the
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 of technology progress will lead to absolute dominance of digital technologies. Online reading will be a new evaluation of literature.

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coherence and cohesion
Introduce the topic more explicitly in your introduction to set a clearer context for your argument.
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Ensure that each main point is fully developed and supported with more specific examples or explanations.
coherence and cohesion
In the conclusion, consider summarizing your key points to reinforce your argument more clearly.
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Strong understanding of the advantages of e-books over paper books.

Fully explain your ideas

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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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