๐™Ž๐™ค๐™ข๐™š ๐™ฅ๐™š๐™ค๐™ฅ๐™ก๐™š ๐™ฉ๐™๐™ž๐™ฃ๐™  ๐™–๐™™๐™ช๐™ก๐™ฉ๐™จ ๐™จ๐™๐™ค๐™ช๐™ก๐™™ ๐™ก๐™š๐™–๐™ง๐™ฃ ๐™ฅ๐™ง๐™–๐™˜๐™ฉ๐™ž๐™˜๐™–๐™ก ๐™จ๐™ ๐™ž๐™ก๐™ก๐™จ ๐™—๐™ฎ ๐™ฉ๐™๐™š๐™ข๐™จ๐™š๐™ก๐™ซ๐™š๐™จ, ๐™ฌ๐™๐™ž๐™ก๐™š ๐™ค๐™ฉ๐™๐™š๐™ง๐™จ ๐™ฉ๐™๐™ž๐™ฃ๐™  ๐™ฉ๐™๐™š๐™ฎ ๐™จ๐™๐™ค๐™ช๐™ก๐™™ ๐™ก๐™š๐™–๐™ง๐™ฃ ๐™›๐™ง๐™ค๐™ข ๐™ฉ๐™š๐™–๐™˜๐™๐™š๐™ง๐™จ. ๐˜ฟ๐™ž๐™จ๐™˜๐™ช๐™จ๐™จ ๐™—๐™ค๐™ฉ๐™ ๐™ซ๐™ž๐™š๐™ฌ๐™จ ๐™–๐™ฃ๐™™ ๐™œ๐™ž๐™ซ๐™š ๐™ฎ๐™ค๐™ช๐™ง ๐™ค๐™ฌ๐™ฃ ๐™ค๐™ฅ๐™ž๐™ฃ๐™ž๐™ค๐™ฃ.

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In today's rapidly evolving world, the debate over whether adults should acquire practical skills independently or through formal instruction has become increasingly relevant.
This
discourse is particularly poignant in the context of Vietnam's dynamic educational landscape. Advocates of self-taught learning argue that it fosters independence and problem-solving skills. In Vietnam,
for example
, many entrepreneurs have successfully launched businesses by self-learning skills like digital marketing or coding.
This
approach not only allows for flexible learning tailored to individual needs but
also
cultivates a spirit of self-reliance.
However
, it's important to consider that self-taught learning can sometimes lead to the acquisition of incomplete or erroneous knowledge, as learners may lack the expertise to discern accurate information.
Conversely
, I believe that structured learning from experienced teachers offers more comprehensive and reliable skill acquisition. Formal education provides a well-rounded and systematically structured curriculum, ensuring that all necessary aspects of a skill are covered.
For instance
, Vietnamese culinary students learning from seasoned chefs gain not only cooking techniques but
also
insights into kitchen management and food safety, which might be overlooked in self-study.
While
self-learning advocates argue that formal education can be rigid, the value of expert guidance and a structured learning path cannot be understated, especially in complex fields. In conclusion,
while
self-taught learning has its merits, particularly in fostering independence, the structured guidance provided by teachers is invaluable for comprehensive skill development. In the Vietnamese context, where both traditional values and modern innovation are cherished, a blend of both learning approaches might be the most beneficial, leveraging the strengths of each to create a more adaptable and skilled adult population.
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  • linguistic abilities
  • cultural exchange
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