The governments should give each citizen a basic income so that they have enough money to live on, even if they are unemployed. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
It is argued that the government should regularly pay
money
to everyone so they can afford minimum living costs. While
I disagree with paying each and every citizen, I do believe helping poor people
for a period of time is a good social scheme.
There are several reasons why I strongly believe a monthly donation to everyone is not considered as
a good social plan to pursue. Change preposition
apply
Firstly
, paying a minimum wage which is decent enough to cover minimum expenses would result in billions of billions of monthly pay by the government which will collapse the financial system of the country. This
money
should be used to boost the economy and develop the infrastructures
of cities. Fix the agreement mistake
infrastructure
Secondly
, statistic shows that over 50 per cent people
are pretty well off and they do not need Change preposition
of people
a
monthly help as they can fully afford their expenses. Correct article usage
apply
Finally
, a monthly pay which provides the minimum expenses may result in reluctance
to seek jobs for some Add an article
a reluctance
people
and as a
result
some Add a comma
result,
people
will quit their jobs because of this
convenient money
.
On the other hand
, helping citizens with temporary financial challenges is undoubtedly a good supportive plan. There might be various ranges of people
who are tight on money
for reasons like losing their jobs, sickness or disabilities who need governmental support for a specific time. There will be different options for the government to collect money
in order to support these people
including levying tax on certain goods or people
, or even paying it as a loan and taking it back in instalments whenever they find a job and their situation changes. This
even can be a motivation to find a job sooner.
In conclusion, I do not believe a monthly pay to each and every citizen will be practical, but supporting the less fortunate is a good plan to consider.Submitted by sajad.bazdar.2012 on
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