The first chart below shows how energy is used in an average Australian household. The second chart shows the percentage of greenhouse gas emissions that result from this energy use

The first chart below shows how energy is used in an average Australian household. The second chart shows the percentage of greenhouse gas emissions that result from this energy use
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The presented pie charts illustrate the distribution of
energy
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usage in a typical Australian household and the corresponding greenhouse gas emissions. In general, it is evident that heating constitutes the largest share of power
consumption
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, accounting for a staggering 42%, followed closely by water heating at 30%. Interestingly, water heating leads to greenhouse gas discharge, contributing to 32%.
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, the primary purpose of
energy
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consumption
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in an average Australian household is attributed to heating, whether for rooms or water.
This
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category collectively surpasses a remarkable 70%.
Therefore
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, cooling and refrigeration have a relatively minor impact on efficiency usage.
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, lighting represents a mere 4%,
while
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other appliances collectively contribute to 15% of electricity utilization, surpassing the combined power use of lighting, cooling, and refrigeration.
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, the gas radiation
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not proportional to the percentage of use. For e.g.,
although
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heating has the highest
consumption
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rate at 42%, it emits only 15% of the total greenhouse gases.
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, other appliances, constituting less than one-fifth of
energy
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consumption
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, generate emissions more than double that chunk. Cooling,
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producing slightly greater emissions, is overshadowed by the considerable impact of both lighting and refrigeration, each contributing double the interest of their
energy
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intake.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Vocabulary: Replace the words energy, consumption with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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