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In some countries, some people get extremely high income and it is believed that this will be of great good to the country while others are of the believe that government should limit the amount of income earned in a country. Discuss both views and give your opinion

#countries #people #income #country #believe #government #limit #amount
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salary earned in a
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 essay will explain both views and will provide my opinion as well in upcoming paragraphs.
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 with,the high income of people is important for many
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 because if they have
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 income they must spend more taxation for
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.Taxation is the major budget of government to improve facilities or
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welfare
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 for people.
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 high income
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 innovation for
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 the government provide
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 to research new
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 for people.
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task achievement
You need to establish a clear introduction that sets the context and mentions both sides of the argument before stating your own opinion. The essay requires a well-rounded discussion on both perspectives mentioned in the prompt. Your essay has begun to touch on both sides, but more development and detailed examples are needed.
coherence cohesion
Ensure that your essay has a logical flow by organizing your ideas into clear paragraphs. Each paragraph should have a central idea, which is then explained, elaborated upon, or exemplified. Use cohesive devices effectively, such as discourse markers and linking words, to connect sentences and paragraphs smoothly.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Economic activity
  • Stimulates growth
  • Progressive tax
  • Income disparity
  • Social mobility
  • Wealth redistribution
  • Government intervention
  • Economic incentive
  • Brain drain
  • Entrepreneurial spirit
  • Innovation
  • Political influence
  • Equitable distribution
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