The tables give information about the temperatures and hours of daylight in London and Sydney during the same weekend in December 2018.

The tables give information about the temperatures and hours of daylight in London and Sydney during the same weekend in December 2018.
The tables give information on the air temperatures and daytime in the UK and Australia from Friday 28th to Sunday 30th of December 2018. It is clearly seen that the average climate in
Sydney
is warm and the daylight is much longer as compared with
London
. In detail, the peak temperature in
Sydney
reached
at
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31
degrees
on Sunday 30th
while
the highest temperature in
London
only has 13
degrees
on Saturday 29th.
Moreover
, it can seen that the climate degree in
London
varied considerably from the lowest 3°C to the highest 13°C, with a gap of 10
degree
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.
Furthermore
, the temperature of
Sydney
in
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this
weekend only
have
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slightly
climb
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from
minimizing
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26
degrees
to
maxing
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31
degrees
,
with in
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5
degrees
.
To sum up
, the period of daylight in
Sydney
is
reached
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around 15 hours
in contrast
to
London
much
short
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only
has
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around 8 hours per day.
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