The tables give information about the temperatures and hours of daylight in London and Sydney during the same weekend in December 2018.

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The tables give information on the air temperatures and daytime in the UK and Australia from Friday 28th to Sunday 30th of December 2018. It is clearly seen that the average climate in

Sydney

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is warm and the daylight is much longer as compared with

London

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. In detail, the peak temperature in

Sydney

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reached

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degrees

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on Sunday 30th

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the highest temperature in

London

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only has 13

degrees

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on Saturday 29th.

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, it can seen that the climate degree in

London

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varied considerably from the lowest 3°C to the highest 13°C, with a gap of 10

degree

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, the temperature of

Sydney

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apply

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this

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weekend only

have

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apply

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slightly

climb

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climbed

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from

minimizing

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degrees

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maxing

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degrees

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with in

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within

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degrees

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, the period of daylight in

Sydney

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reached

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around 15 hours

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London

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much

short

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shorter

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only

has

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around 8 hours per day.

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The tables give information about the temperatures and hours of daylight in London and Sydney during the same weekend in December 2018.

These days, in many countries, fewer and fewer people want to become teachers, particularly in secondary schools. What are the reasons for this? How could more people be encouraged to come into the teaching profession?

"Fatherhood ought to be emphasized as much as motherhood. The idea that women are solely responsible for deciding whether or not to have babies leads on to the idea that they are also responsible for bringing the children up." To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Some people think young people should be required to have full time education until they are at least 18 years old. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Some people think that competition at work, at school and in daily life is a good thing. Others believe that we should try to cooperate more, rather than competing against each other. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Some people believe that a country will benefit greatly by a high percentage of young people going to universities. Others argue that it only leads to a higher unemployment rate. Discuss both viewpoints and give your own opinion.