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In the future all cars,buses and trucks will be driverless. The only people traveling inside these vehicles will be passengers. Do you think the advantages of driverless vehicles outweigh the disadvantages?

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With the development of high-tech of society, more and more people believe that a concept
about
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 driverless
vihecles
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vehicles
 will be realized in the future and every
ordinaries
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 will be
welling
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 to accept the new lifestyle.
Althrough
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Although
 it would exist some
problem
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 of personal safety. I suppose those
trend
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 might release much more manpower and solve some complicated daily
issue
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issues
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 for individuals. On the one hand, adopting non-person driving might be
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 economic human
resources
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 saving plan.
A society
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do
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 not need a large amount of drivers any more, and
government
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 can allocate plus manpower to
another position
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 or
field
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 in that they can
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 more new contributions.
On the other hand
, even someone
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think
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car
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 without
driver
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 might bring
to
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a majority of issues about safety,
while
 I believe that the project will be a
high profit
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 business and high technology
companeis
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companies
 will try to
recearch
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research
 high quality and performance vehicles and solve the crucial difficulty for driverless automatics.
Furthermore
,
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also
 can promote
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changes
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a
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society's technology and economy for their
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 cars.
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Task Achievement
Your essay demonstrates an attempt at a response but is somewhat repetitive and lacks a clear opinion. Ensure that you answer the question directly and fully explain your viewpoint with a clear introduction and conclusion.
Coherence and Cohesion
Your essay lacks clear progression of ideas and does not make adequate use of cohesive devices. Try to structure your essay more logically with clear topic sentences and cohesive linking words.

Fully explain your ideas

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • driverless vehicles
  • advantages
  • disadvantages
  • increased safety
  • reduced traffic congestion
  • improved efficiency
  • accessibility
  • disabled
  • elderly
  • job displacement
  • privacy concerns
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