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The chart below gives information on the average cost of a monthly plan from four different mobile phone providers in a European country, between January and September 2012, measured in euros.

The chart below gives information on the average cost of a monthly plan from four different mobile phone providers in a European country, between January and September 2012, measured in euros.
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The graph gives information on the average fee of a monthly plan for cell phone constructors in a European country in 2012. It is clearly seen that there has been an apparent increase in figures for all providers except Sim TX which experienced a decline in the given period. In detail, the amount of average cost for the monthly plan in the cell phone of the Alpha started at around 5
euros
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 in January a moderate climb to about 7
euros
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 in April, and after that month, a slight decrease back to almost $5 in June.
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, there was a skyrocket to almost $25 in
September
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 on the other provider, the Sim TX is a gradual increase from starting around $9 to $14 in June which was followed by a considerable drop to around $8 in
September
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. on the other line, the Lex company the monthly plan for mobile phones started at 13
euros
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 in the first month with a slight fall to 10
euros
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 in February, which was followed by a steady growth to almost 18
euros
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 in
September
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, for Domo company, the monthly fee is the highest as compared with other companies, which started at $15 in the first month,
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, followed by a slight rise to about $17 in March. A minimal drop to around $16 was indicated in March, which was followed by a steady rise to around $24 recorded in
September
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Vocabulary: Replace the words euros, september with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "gives" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "gives" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "drop" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "rise" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slight" was used 3 times.
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