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Some people think books are losing important as a source od information and entertainmnet. To what extent do you agree?

#people #books #source #od #information #entertainmnet
Have you ever wondered
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world without
books
?
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 some people argue that
books
 are losing their position as a
value
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source
 of
information
 and
entertainmnet
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entertainment
.
This
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,
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 will provide
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 that as an
indivisual
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individual
 I agree that
books
 lost
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 core of
information
 and entertainment.
Books
 have always been our
source
 of
information
 over the past years.
Also
, without
them
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them,
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 we would not have been able to read nor get to explore the world around us. Over
the
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time, they are losing their
interset
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interest
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 after the invention of the Internet. As It
became
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has become
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 less
affective
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effective
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 even to the hand of
public
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 to use, since they can search or type any idea with one click
in
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 Google search.
As a result
, It became easier to surf the
information
 rather than look at it
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.
Eventhough
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Even though
,
books
 have been used as a core of
entertainmnet
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entertainment
. In leisure time, children purchase them to have the pleasure of reading.
Unforunatly
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Unfortunately
, Its
source
 is fading away after the trend of reading from E-
books
 rather than traditional
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.
In addition
, people nowadays
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 to be
less
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 readers. That can be reponsible to
writters
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writers
 to quit their jobs. As
this
 kind of
leiusre
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leisure
 will not be
avaliable
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available
 in near future. In conclusion, I clearly agree that
books
 are
diminsing
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diminishing
 their fount of knowledge and
source
 of pleasure in free time.
Thus
, with the new technology and the use of artificial
intellegence
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intelligence
 people will
extent
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 to use
less
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books
.
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task achievement
Your essay partially addresses the prompt, but the extent of your agreement or disagreement is not developed fully nor exemplified sufficiently. Ensure your position is clearly stated throughout the essay and expanded upon with specific examples and sound reasoning.
coherence cohesion
Your essay lacks clear logical progression of ideas. Consider structuring your paragraphs to first introduce the concept, follow with supporting arguments, and conclude with an explanation of how the examples support your main points.

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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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