Study the table below that shows the results of a survey of 200 adolescents and their parents. Then compare the first paragraphs of two different responses to the survey and answer questions 1-2. 1 Which response do you think is more satisfactory? Why? 2 Why do you think the writer of Response 2 has chosen to include certain supporting details and not others?
The data given represents that the table contains the result of a survey of views of
parental
on adolescent's Replace the word
parents
decision making
, it is crucial to understand that Add a hyphen
decision-making
Linking Words
this
figures and restrictions are significantly varied with age and gender.
The former,Correct determiner usage
these
fathers
represent the highest figure among most of the indicated topics around their children making Use synonyms
adequately
choices,one instance that exemplifies Change the adverb
adequate
this
point is Linking Words
fathers
accounted for over 34% with a great deal of difference among all subjects.
The latter,mothers Use synonyms
comes
a close second place after Change the verb form
come
fathers
in comparison Use synonyms
adolescence
, Change preposition
to adolescence
however
mothers Linking Words
reaching
a peak for; "what friends they make" with 78% Wrong verb form
reached
while
Linking Words
Fathers
,boy and Use synonyms
subsequently
girl adolescents,with 76%, 22% and 17% respectively. More importantly even though Linking Words
household
put approximately similar restrictions for girl and boy children,sons are Fix the agreement mistake
households
involving
a slightly more collaborative Wrong verb form
involved
decision making
than daughters.
To finalize Add a hyphen
decision-making
this
point, among 4 Linking Words
diffrent
parts of a Correct your spelling
different
houshold
,householders mainly make decisions in terms of most decisions their child Correct your spelling
household
educate
with .Correct subject-verb agreement
educates
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words fathers with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "represents" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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