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Some people believe that professionals, such as doctors and engineers, should be required to work in the country where they did their training. Others believe they should be free to work in another country if they wish. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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These days, there is no doubt that the world is flat and humans could never have embarked on our ascent to unparalleled power to conquer nature
as well as
 reach a higher level of development without the contribution of experts. A lot of
people
 believe that professionals like
engineers
 and
doctors
 ought to be obliged to
work
 in the country where they were educated.
Whereas
, others believe they should be free to
work
 overseas as they wish. In
this
 essay, I will discuss the rationales behind these two views before showing I
favor
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 the latter point of view.
To begin
 with, when
doctors
 and
engineers
 use skills that have served in
the
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their
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countries
 of origin, they have always been an expression of national gratitude.
For instance
,
doctors
 can take care of a fellow countryman, one dedicated to helping patients or
engineers
 can give an idea to construct infrastructure with an aim to grow-up economy.
Besides
, they will be more beneficial for all members of society to have a high-quality life. Another point to make is that the issue of brain drain still has a significant impact on the human resources of
countries
, seeing that
people
 have a tendency to seek a job with a level of remuneration suitable for themselves, transfers from areas of poverty and socio-economic development to more highly developed areas.
Therefore
, as for the aspects professionals
work
 in their
countries
 bring more advantages for the country not only in the elements of the economy but
also
 in society, politics,… Regarding the problem,
people
 can choose and decide to
work
 abroad because when we go overseas will help us step out of our comfort zone, and learn things about ourselves.
For example
, when we experience new knowledge and suffer environment, it will help us fine-tune our knowledge, things easy support to apply and find a job in companies with the desire. More and more, we have self-improvement and make the best version ourselves. Another essential point to consider is that experts who want to
work
 abroad may struggle with language barriers, culture, and lifestyle,…
such
 as
doctors
 and
engineers
 having communication problems with clients and patients. Asian and European styles have nothing in common, living standards are still higher than the
countries
 of origin. Plus, a
work
 abroad brings more opportunities in career path, life quality, and social welfare. For the reasons mentioned above, I realized that
people
 should be free to
work
 in another country if they wish, just that you are always safe and sound, bring more benefits to society, and get rid of stress after working time.
Therefore
, we need to strive and make the most of our strengths that become international citizens.
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Task Response
Ensure a clear opinion is presented and maintained throughout the essay.
Task Response
Expand on your ideas by providing more detailed and specific examples to support your arguments.
Coherence and Cohesion
Work on the logical flow and transitions between paragraphs to enhance the essay's cohesion.
Coherence and Cohesion
Use cohesive devices appropriately to link ideas and improve the flow of the essay.
Lexical Resource and Grammatical Range
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • professionals
  • doctors
  • engineers
  • required
  • training
  • home country
  • cultural
  • linguistic
  • advantages
  • economic impact
  • free
  • another country
  • globalization
  • international collaboration
  • improving
  • skills
  • knowledge
  • experience
  • opinion
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