The use of personal cars has increased more than ever before but this use of cars causes many problems. What are those problems? To reduce these problems, should we discourage people to use cars? Give reasons for your answers and include any relevant examples from your own experience or knowledge.

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Recently, the number of private
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possessed has been getting higher than before.
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it is creating many problems in society
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as increasing
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congestion
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,
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, it is more private and comfortable for long journeys. In
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essay, I will examine the pros and cons of having personal vehicles
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giving my opinion
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in a summary. Owning private conveyance has become a phenomenon, particularly in cities.
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, the usage of personal vehicles has contributed to
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congestion
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. The population in cities is crowded and it worsens with each person using personal
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which surely will increase the
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congestion
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, even make it worse. The increase in
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condition is associated with stress levels because individuals have to spend more time commuting because of getting stuck in
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jams for more hours.
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, in Jakarta, to go to my office, I need to spend more than 2 hours by public transport because there is an elementary private school in which one student is transported using one car which causes heavy
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congestion
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.
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, possessing private
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is
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beneficial, particularly for
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who want to drive on long journeys. It can shorten the time and it is more convenient.
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, when I go to my hometown, it is more comfortable using my personal car than using public transportation like a bus. I can drive it and take a rest whenever I want. Most importantly, it becomes more private because it is only my family and I during the journeys, not others involved. In conclusion, the increase in possessing personal
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has positive and negative points from both views. We can not stop
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from buying private conveyance,
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, to overcome the negative impacts
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as
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congestion
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, the government should establish policies to encourage
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to use public transportation more than private vehicles. The more
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using public transportation, the more
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congestion
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can be curbed.
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, the stress level will be decreased.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Traffic congestion
  • Emissions
  • Urban sprawl
  • Public transportation
  • Carbon footprint
  • Non-renewable resources
  • Eco-friendly
  • Sustainable
  • Telecommuting
  • Electric vehicles
  • Infrastructure
  • Cycling lanes
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