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The bar chart below shows the popularity of well-known Instagram accounts in 2018 and 2021. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The bar chart below shows the popularity of well-known Instagram accounts in 2018 and 2021. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The bar chart illustrates the popularity of some famous accounts in
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social media during a three-year time period. As can be seen, with growth
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 technology in a mere three
yaers
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years
 the followers of famous people soared rapidly
in
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 a social media called
instagram
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Instagram
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.
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, Selena Gomez with a little less than 250
millions
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follwers
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followers
, was the most popular person on
instagramm
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 in 2018, but after 3 years Cristiano Ronaldo took that place with a big rise of 300
millions
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 followers has
became
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 the most
nfluencer
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influence
influencer
 in the world.
Secondly
, The Rock with slightly above 250
millions
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follwers
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followers
 on
instagram
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Instagram
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hold
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 the third position
of
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this
 top-5 well-known person list. and Ariana Grande and Kylie Jenner with almost the same number of
followes
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followers
( 250
millions
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follwers
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followers
) became the fourth and fifth
influencer
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 respectively, And the
last
 one
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 the list is the old number one influencer, Selena Gomez, with slightly less than 250
millions
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million
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follwers
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followers
.
Submitted by Farzaneh Ka on

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