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Topic: Spoken communication is always more powerful than written communication. To what extend do you agree or disagree?

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In the modern technological era,
whereas
 the majority of people are in favour of oral interactions with each other, written communication has a crucial role among people of all ages. I will highlight both of these views in the following paragraphs.
To begin
 with, most individuals, especially youngsters prefer oversimplifying socialising with others orally with the help of technological advances. I mean that these days a person can minimize his or her precious time by using a variety of devices, apps, platforms, social networks and more rather than just writing a letter or utilising post service.
For instance
,
according to
 the result of a recent survey, it is estimated that about 60 % of the world population is actively engaged in voice chats, live streams, and video messages on some social media platforms,
such
 as Imo, Instagram, Telegram, Zoom, WhatsApp, ... .
Nonetheless
, there is a prime goal of written communication formation which aims at keeping essential information, records, documents, events, and so on in order to bequeath them to future generations.
That is
 why, it is vitally important to save official writing styles in different fields, like in education, science, medicine, and just like these. To achieve
this
 development, governments should subsidise and control the press
along with
 the post system.
Besides
, as some of them are not interested enough in reading newspapers or magazines, one application called Threads has been introduced to attract users to participate in social conversations in a written way. In conclusion, in spite of the fact that spoken communication is superior to written one amongst humans, there should be a balance in usage between them to enhance our worldviews.
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coherence cohesion
Ensure that each paragraph contains a clear main idea and that the transition between ideas is smooth. Use a range of cohesive devices to link ideas together more effectively.
task achievement
Address all parts of the task, ensuring a balanced approach to discussing both spoken and written communication. Include a personal opinion clearly stated in the introduction and the conclusion.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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