After being punished, many criminals continue to commit crimes. Why do some people commit crimes even after having been punished? What measures can be taken to tackle this problem.

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Numerous lawbreakers keep breaking
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even after getting penalized for their wrongdoing. There are many reasons for repeating
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activities regardless of spending time in
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. I am going to discuss some facts about it in my forthcoming paragraphs
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on what can be done to fix these issues. Many offenders carry on their unlawful acts because of their transgressor thinking. There is no sense of humanity found in their nature.
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, they do not possess sympathy towards mankind. Being dominant or bullying other people
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among them. Another big reason for
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act is
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number of
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youngsters. After not getting proper job opportunities they choose to become offenders. They look at it as
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easy way to earn money
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no amount
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stops them.
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, some kids
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their early days in
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where
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of criminal activities
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higher. Despite
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their
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good upbringing they somehow indulge with bad individuals
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town and start causing harm to the societies. Probably, one can do many things to outweigh
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problem.
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new technical skills so that their minds start diverting towards something positive. One illustration of
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knowledge about other things.
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to conduct
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on changing the way of thinking.
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,
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of crimes
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increasing even after getting punished. Criminals start doing bad activities again after coming out of
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.
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,
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can be solved by taking some adequate
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such
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as counselling them or teaching them a new set of programs.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • rehabilitation
  • reintegration
  • recidivism
  • underlying issues
  • support systems
  • criminal networks
  • peer pressure
  • barriers
  • psychological assessment
  • addiction treatment
  • economic factors
  • sentencing
  • data analysis
  • community-based programs
  • restorative justice
  • vocational training
  • social inequalities
  • preventive measures
  • post-release
  • crime cycle
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