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the map below show an industrial area in the town of Norbition and planned future development of the site.

the map below show an industrial area in the town of Norbition and planned future development of the site.
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The two maps provide information about
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the change
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change
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 in an industrial site in the town of Norbition and projected future
reconstructed
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 of the
area
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. From the maps it can be clearly that the
area
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 saw spectacular development.
And there
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 is no longer an industrial
area
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and
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instead
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 it has become
residential
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a residential
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area
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. In the planned future
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renovated
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renovated,
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 there
is
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 no factory and it
is
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 replaced with houses. Shops
has
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 been opened to the southwest of the main
square
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as well as
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 shops,
a
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medical
center
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 has been set up to the southeast of the bigger
square
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.
to
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to
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north
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the north
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 of the main
square
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 a small
square
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 has been constructed. A bridge is built
cross
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across
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 the river and has connected the farmland and site to each other. To the northwest of the big
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square
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square,
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 a new way and some apartments are made. the east side of the
area
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 has significantly developed and a playground is constructed for children to play there and a school has been built for children’s education.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words area, square with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "maps" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • industrial area
  • planned development
  • existing facilities
  • proposed changes
  • infrastructure
  • public spaces
  • sustainable development
  • green spaces
  • pollution control
  • local community
  • job creation
  • amenities
  • property values
  • displacement
  • traffic congestion
  • environmental degradation
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