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Band 6.5

In the future, nobody will buy printed newspapers or books because they will be able to read everything they want online without paying. To what extent do you agree or disagree.

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It is expected that physical newspapers or
books
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 will become less desirable in the future
due to
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 the ability to
access
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 them online for free.
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 essay will posit why
this
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 statement might be true to a certain degree. The mass adoption of digital technologies is causing disruption across the globe. Media and publishing industries are no exception. There seems to be a shift in
people
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's behaviour in terms of consuming text-based
content
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. Newspapers are being replaced by news websites and applications.
While
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books
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 are being replaced by digital
books
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, audiobooks,
as well as
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 podcasts. The shift occurred
due to
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 the ease of
access
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 in which all that
content
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 could be consumed anytime and anywhere using gadgets. By using them in digital formats,
people
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 could find their preferred readings using sophisticated search methods, eliminating the need for
people
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 to go to the bookstores for hours just searching for which
books
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 are within their liking. But the involvement of digital technologies extends beyond that, companies could observe their consumers' digital footprints and give reading recommendations based on their behaviour. These capabilities provide additional channels to direct users towards using digital alternatives. Some
content
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 might be more desirable when they are cheaper or free to
access
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. Having newspapers and
books
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 in digital formats will eliminate the costs of printing and distributing, resulting in cheaper products.
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, some companies exert a new business model in which they put advertisements in their
content
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, enabling the end users to
access
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 it for free.
However
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, the economic factors might not be the main reasons for
people
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 to opt out of using printed media, as there are a lot of
people
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that
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 are still willing to pay the same price just for the practicality of digital formats. The change in customers' preferences towards digital readings is mainly caused by the ease of
access
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 and additional channels to attract readers.
While
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 the customers' costs might have an effect, it does not pose the main factor for
people
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 to change their preferences.

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The essay introduction could be more concise and engage directly with the extent to which the writer agrees or disagrees.
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There should be a clear opinion stated in the introduction and a restatement of this opinion in the conclusion, which was somewhat missing.
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The main points need to be more distinctly supported with specific examples or evidence, not just hypothetical scenarios or general statements.
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Consider employing a wider range of cohesive devices and paragraphing strategies to ensure a clear and logical structure.
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Make sure each paragraph has a clear central topic and that all sentences within it relate directly to this topic.
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Work on the concluding paragraph to concisely summarize the main points and clearly state your position, reflecting the introduction.

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To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • accessibility
  • convenience
  • cost-effective
  • cultural value
  • sentimental value
  • reliability
  • distracting
  • access to
  • digital devices
  • internet
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