The graph below shows the number of tourists visiting a particular Caribbean island between 2010 and 2017 Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features,and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the number of tourists visiting a particular Caribbean island between 2010 and 2017

Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features,and make 

comparisons where relevant.
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The graph illustrates figures for
visitors
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to the Caribbean
islands
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over 7 years from 2010 to 2017.
According to
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these graphics, the information contained the number of people who
staying
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on cruise ships,
visitors
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staying on the island and the total amount respectively. the figures are given in millions.
Overall
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, The graphic which indicated the total statistic of tourists visiting Caribbean
islands
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had the most increased
then
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followed by the number of tourists who remained on the cruise and
visitors
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who stayed on the island.
Firstly
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, The total sum of people who had visited these
islands
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had risen significantly from 1 in 2010 to reached a peak at 3.5 in 2017 .
Similarly
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, The number of
visitors
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that stayed on the ships started at nearly 0
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increased sharply to 2 between 2010 and 2017.
Lastly
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, The company
who
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that
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remained on the
islands
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rose moderately from slightly below 1 in 2010 to 1.5 in 2017 and matched the point with the figure of those who stayed on cruises around almost 1.5 in the gap of 1 year.
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Replace the words visitors, islands with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "stayed" was used 3 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • Tourists
  • Caribbean
  • Visit
  • Graph
  • Summarize
  • Trend
  • Fluctuate
  • Peak season
  • Anomalies
  • Increase
  • Decrease
  • Comparisons
  • Sector
  • Significant
  • Patterns
  • Overview
  • Analyze
  • Data
  • Year-on-year
  • Percentage
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