The role of parents and family, in the future success of a person is more important than knowledge and skills learn at school. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

The idea of becoming successful because of the guardian’s upbringing has more importance than getting
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from institutions. I strongly agree with the statement and equally believe that the influence of elders over
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more impact on their life rather than school or college. In forthcoming paragraphs, I am going to elaborate
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in detail,
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giving solid reasons to support my points of view.
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place to start early
education
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is considered to be
home
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.
Parents
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put a lot of effort on their children, so that they can teach them basic
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or manners about how to behave with anyone outside.
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to
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,
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mothers take the responsibility of educating their
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from an early age
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while
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doing other household work.
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, in a country like Pakistan
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prefer to educate toddlers on their own at
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instead
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of sending them to
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centres.
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, they tend to be more mature by showing a good attitude towards others. Achieving good grades and fabulous opportunities can
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be considered a positive point, provided that
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practice becomes the norm among caretakers. Learning knowledge at
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an early stage benefits them
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performing well in schools resulting in getting admission
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top colleges
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developed countries in future. One illustration of
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is in developing countries like Pakistan moving abroad for better
education
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is a common exercise among students. They have to study hard in order to get more information so they can do well in exams and
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a high percentage.
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,
kids
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whose
education
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starts from an early age at
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by their
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easily fulfil
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dream as compared to others.
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, skills and other sets of knowledge can be learned in later parts of life. If someone wants to secure a proper job when they get older, they will have to be an expert in some specific field.
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, many academies and tuitions these days are providing service to individuals, so they can master
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areas of study.
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,
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can
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learn about it in companies as well. Many big organizations are organizing workshops to polish
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analytical thinking and make them ready for the coming days.
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, learning knowledge from
parents
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at
home
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is more important than whatever they attain at school. From my perspective, studying at early centres is mandatory for everyone,
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no one can leave a better impression on
kids
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than their
parents
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.
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parents
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develop the base of their
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from
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ages
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and guide them about basic manners
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communication skills.
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, other things can be learned
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later stages as well.

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Coherence & Cohesion
Develop paragraphs sufficiently with specific examples, with each paragraph focusing on one main idea. Ensure that examples are directly related to the question prompt, and provide clearer links between the role of parents and future success.
Task Response
While the position on the issue is clear, ensure that you address the full scope of the essay prompt by acknowledging the role of school education. Provide more analysis and comparison between the roles of family and school in shaping success.
Coherence & Cohesion
To improve the logical flow of ideas, use a range of cohesive devices more effectively, such as linking words, synonyms, and pronouns, to ensure the essay progresses smoothly from introduction to conclusion.

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