The two maps below show road access to a city hospital in 2007 and in 2010.

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The two maps illustrate the improvements in road access to a city hospital over the period of 3 years between 2007 and 2010.

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, the facilities of the hospital were modernized and new premises were constructed. It can be seen that the city hospital was located in the north and the main road passed from the west to the east, which was connected to the hospital and bypassed from all sides in 2007. On the southeast side of the hospital, a car park was located for the public and staff and bus stops were built near

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, new facilities were built and old ones were reconstructed in 2010. Bus stops were demolished and a new bus station was built to replace them.

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, roundabouts were introduced to the hospital road and were built from both sides. On the west side of the hospital, a car park was constructed for the public.

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Coherence and Cohesion: 9.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

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Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 9.0

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Task Achievement: 4.0

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4 paragraphs

152 words

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Topic Vocabulary:

accessibility
dual carriageway
roundabout
traffic flow
multi-story car park
green spaces
pedestrian provisions
footpaths
traffic signals
construction phase
ambulances
carriageway expansion
traffic congestion
pedestrian crossings
urban planning
infrastructure development

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