Nowadays many people choose to be self-employed, rather than work for a company. Why might this be the case? What could be the disadvantages of being self-employed?
Today many people choose to
work
for themselves rather than for others. This
can be caused by various reasons, but the main one is due to
the fact that many companies offer a poor work
balance between private and professional life. Nevertheless
, such
a choice can present possible disadvantages.
Firstly
, people who are doing a corporate job often find it difficult to balance between their work
and personal life. In the past, when competition was only within a country, most jobs required a minimum of 8 hours a day. However
, now a lot of employers oblige their workers with additional work
owing to the rising competition in the global market. The second cause that might be noted, in my view, is the framework of an average job, where repetitive work
is encouraged restricting individuality and it can be a problem for some people.
Nevertheless
, such
choices can lead to many problems and expectations do not usually tackle with a reality. The main problem with self-employment is the work
is not available mostly and there can be ups and downs in pay, in comparison with a corporate job. As a result
, most of them give up after a month. Additionally
, a lot of these so-called adventurers make such
a decision inconsiderately without a safety net for presumable negative outcomes. Hence
, when they encounter the real market, they find it hard to get fair pay for their endeavors
.
Change the spelling
endeavours
To conclude
, although
such
decisions can have a positive outcome in the long term, but
Remove the conjunction
apply
this
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