The graph below shows the number of tourists visiting a particular Caribbean island between 2010 and 2017 Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features,and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the number of tourists visiting a particular Caribbean island between 2010 and 2017

Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features,and make 

comparisons where relevant.
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The line graph provides information about how many
travelers
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travellers
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visit
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visited
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a specific
caribbean
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Caribbean
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island
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whether they stay on
cruise
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a cruise
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ship or on
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island
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an island
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from 2010 to 2017.
Overall
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, it is evident that the total of
people
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who came to the
island
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constantly increased from time to
tim
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time
Tim
.
People
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who stayed on
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island
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the island
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had more
people
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than on
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the yacht
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yacht
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yachts
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before in the next seven years the number of guests
chose
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who chose
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cruise ships
outperform
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outperformed
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the
amount
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number
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of guests who
live
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lived
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on
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island
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the island
an island
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. Looking at the details, in 2010, visitors who
stay
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stayed
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on vessels and on
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island
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the island
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started at 0,25
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millions
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million
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and 0,75
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millions
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million
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people
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, respectively. Increasing
about
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by about
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0,25
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millions
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million
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people
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in the year
of
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apply
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2011, the gap between tourists who rest on
beach
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beaches
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and boats was merely 0,25
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millions
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million
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people
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. Over 5 years, the number of
people
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who had
vacation
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vacationed
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on
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island
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the island
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grew twice from before and remained at 1,5
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millions
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million
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people
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while
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the sum of visitants who stayed on cruise ships
had
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apply
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fluctuated and reached 1,25
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millions
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million
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people
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. Between 2015 and 2016, both categories had
same
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the same
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numbers before continuously increasing to 2
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millions
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million
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people
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for
people
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who lived on vessels and 1,5
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millions
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million
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people
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for
people
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who stayed on
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island
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the island
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.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Vocabulary: Replace the words island, people, millions with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "stay" was used 5 times.
Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • Tourists
  • Caribbean
  • Visit
  • Graph
  • Summarize
  • Trend
  • Fluctuate
  • Peak season
  • Anomalies
  • Increase
  • Decrease
  • Comparisons
  • Sector
  • Significant
  • Patterns
  • Overview
  • Analyze
  • Data
  • Year-on-year
  • Percentage
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