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In some countries, owning home rather than renting one is very important for people. Why might be the case? Do you think this is a positive or negative situations?

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In some countries, ownership of people's
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home
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homes
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 is an important matter. In these
countries
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countries,
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 it is very important to
your
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have your
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 own
home
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 rather than renting it. It might be indifferent for some, but for these people it
matter
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. Why is that the case? you might wonder. I think it is because because your
home
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 is supposed to be exactly what
is
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it
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 sounds like, your
home
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. As a
human
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human,
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 I think we long after having
stuff
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the stuff
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 to call our own,
does
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not
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no
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 matter what it is, but
humas
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humans
 always want to claim ownership.
This
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 is nothing new and it has been like
this
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thorugh
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through
 human history, like colonies
for example
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, which later once again became the same country as before
lead
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 by its own
ihabitants
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inhabitants
. People will always want to be the one to decide what happens to them and when you rent your
home
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 you can'
t
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event
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even
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 paint it without
owner's
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the owner's
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 permission. If you as a person are renting an apartment there might be a lot of stressors in your life. A scratched wall can cause you major headache
,
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 because the wall is not yours. The bedroom you are currently sleeping
is
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in
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 might not be available as long as you hope, things happen in life and
may be
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maybe
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 the next landlord
wom'
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won't
t
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 have you as a tenant. In
other perspective
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another perspective
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, not owning your
home
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 could be a relief when it comes to your
finance
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finances
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. As a renter, you won'
t
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 have to pay
mortgage
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the mortgage
a mortgage
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, take loans or spend an awful lot of money on buying the property. You wouldn'
t
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 have to worry about the
house
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housing
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 market crashing or a natural disaster
destrying
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destroying
 your expensive
home
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. Bottom line, as a human I feel like we need to have a
home
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 and calling it your own can make that more special. I personally would rather own my house, because
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 whatever happens it is on me and no one else.
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